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    dots Submission Name: L.S.D. 2dots
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    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Dark
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    dotsL.S.D. 2dots
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    I sold my soul, the devil inside.
    For the price, I feel alive.
    In my veins the devil ends,
    and all the snakes under my skin.

    I realize what has begun,
    evaperate my fear for fun.
    See my dreams in front of me,
    all my nightmares running free.

    As I will drift to bed,
    my nightmares fill anothers head.
    Who have never seen hell before,
    and now they'll wake in sweat and horrer.

    And I will sleep in fantasy,
    well all my dreams seem real to me.




    Submitted on 2005-03-07 09:53:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting. now is this feeling of fantasy as you put it after you take this drug? nice rhyming though u are getting better. you never know what to expect! u kid me at the edge of my seat!adioz.
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by PookiezBookie | [ Reply to This ]
      oh. nice. jaja. loving the whole idea. selling the soul, the devil inside, blahblahblah.. after that the you became devil-less(a word?)? i think i need to sell my soul. this was a bit scattered or unclear to me, but that might be cos of my hangover. in my opinion there could be something more, i dont know, maybe more describing or something, it just didnt seem finished to me. oh whaever. the idea was original. i think. more of it? fell in love with the title. greatgreat.

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    As I will drift to bed,
    my nightmares fill anothers head.
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by _taateli_ | [ Reply to This ]


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