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Author: painofthanatos
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It's finished now, but It's not about me you guys, there is no guilty concious! (there is just lack of ability to spell)


Hiding between the sheets
It is just you and me
There is no him for now
It is just you and me

I turn his picture down
He doesn't need to see this
Our love is none of his business
It is just yours and mine

I take the ring off
It fits fine in my purse
No one needs to know
It is just you and me

Running home, I'm late
I forgot to put the ring on
I say it was in my way...
I don't tell him of what
It is just you and me

Nothing matters to him
We're curled up in the couch
The ring sparkling in the light
It is just him and me

He'll never know that I love you
That's just between you and me
You'll never know that I still love him
That's just between him and mee

Submitted on 2005-03-07 12:23:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ahhhhh cheating. This is written as if a person is cheating with no remorse, no conscience. Actually, I think turning a picture down "so he doesn't see this", isn't to protect him, but more of a reflection of the cheater's guilt.

Great touch with writing as if speaking to the co-cheater, and at the end, it is more like you have been talking to yourself the whole time, because the whole last stanza, you wouldn't be saying to either of them.

You sit in the cheater's seat pretty well with this one, giving your write some credibility. The whole undertone of you sitting alone talking to yourself (I pictured you saying these things to yourself at about 10 miles over the speed limit rushing home so as to not be busted)... weird how we often talk to ourselves about the bad things we have done... especially when it is something that eventually causes us to be alone for good...

Thank God this wasn't about you... it was about my ex wife.

good write
| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
  Whoooey ...Seems like everyone is doing it now ...Good write...I love how it didnt place felt romantic ..and sad...i could taste the confusion ...I like the last stanza ...its was very simple ...really honest ..and just summed the whole lot up for me ...Good Job and Blessed Be
| Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  fu<k this, dude- cheating is the greatest insult- no excuses made. fu<k this. it's so fu<king sad that it happens to so many innocent people. very clever poem- no questions that. very "Does He Love You" by Reba McEntire and Linda Black. the subject just upsets me... it's sad. nice job- hope to see more from you- *md*
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
  It's interesting how you managed to show that you CAN lead a double life, and be in love with two people at the same time. I know, I did it once. Very nice poem.
| Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, I had to comment again. I like it even better with the last stanza. But I think in the last line, you meant me, not mee.
Good job.

| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  you say it's not about you and i find this amusing looking at all the advice you were given on keeping your boys straight hehe.

[[I say it was in my way...
I don't tell him of what]]

haha even if this isn't about you, that sounds exactly like you. always finding the loophole in everything :) good poem
| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]
  that's kinda scary... I hope this wasn't about me because well I just hope it wasn't and if it's about you well then... hmmm... I liked this although at the end I had to read it about four times because I was reading to fast and got all confused... the words were good and the message was perfectly portraited... great job courtney...
| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting a poem about the joy and love of cheating. Though many here might jump on you for that,however I won't,because when one is in a loveless marriage, well maybe even mean spirited as well. Though in your belief or for the kids you stay. We all need to feel love and to be loved.

I give u kudos for poating such a poem.

keep writing and I will keep reading
| Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  courtney! i didnt know you were a cheater! :-p but thats okay we all have our guilty secrets :-D

[[I take the ring off
It fits fine in my purse]]

i like those lines the best. i was going to say why but now the words fail me. anywho i like this and i'll check for the rest of it later :)
| Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]
  Does someone have a guilty conscience?

Anyway, this is good and I can't wait to read the rest of it. It has a wonderful message, well maybe not wonderful because ya know, cheating is never a good thing. But it gives insite to what might go on in the head of someone who does cheat.

Good job, Courtney.

| Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]

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