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    dots Submission Name: My Welcome Backdots
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    Author: sheltie
    ASL Info:    17/male/bloomington,MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 46/66/30
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots My Welcome Backdots
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    They say welcome back and welcome home, but Iím not home until Iím with the one I love and we are together. I go to our tree where we first kissed, but you arenít there all that is there is a marble stone palette and etched in the marble reads "Here lies Sarah Morgan Feb. 8, 1981-Dec. 23, 2004.í I fall to my knees and breakdown completely because she was gone. I didnít even get a letter telling me she passed away. I sit there not knowing what to do because my heart and soul were hers and we made so many plans that have now scattered to the wind.




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      need a better structure...but other than that it was really good...i can truly relate to how you feel though...i love the way you decided to reveal she died
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very pretty but i think it could do well with more structuring. It's more like an essay than a poem. But i really liked the idea, and the vivid imagery. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]


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