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    dots Submission Name: For Taateli-dots
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    Author: MerryDeath
    ASL Info:    20/f/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 348/358/72
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       *lip* i need my faerie fix- *grins*


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    dotsFor Taateli-dots
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    Dear glitter-faerie-
    where’s thy muse?
    has she departed?
    left thy talent to diffuse?

    i think not, dear thing
    thy poet’s tongue has lied
    thy fever is still burning hot
    thou simply has not tried!

    but don’t lie down, dear faerie
    ‘tis not that kind of ill
    it be the fever of twist and sick
    and long for blood to spill

    come now, faerie, don’t laugh
    arise and grab thy pen
    one sprinkle of thy glitter-dust
    will help thee write again!





    Submitted on 2005-03-07 12:51:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      By diffuse, I sense that as we become less focused we lose our grip on creating. OK, let's get concentrated here, pull this into the high octane range eh? Now, knowing that I haven't tried, that's a real one. Not so much since I've been on the site, though, it keeps me
    writing, it's lovely!
    The book called The ABC's of Writing means simply..
    Apply Butt to Chair....easy, don't forget the pen.

    Yes words are like blood, and though we don't go to the barbershop any more for bloodletting, it's such a good metaphor. Rhythm's dead on, all the rhymes work, clean clear message, cool beans babe.
    This reminds me of "Talking out of Turn" it's the first post I put here at elite, I think you would like it.
    Thanks for sharing,
    love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      No one commented ....they suck ..You allll Suck !!! ..
    Umm so anyway ..
    Of course i love this ..It has fairy's ...and i love em ...But it was a good write ..even without them ..The old fashioned charm was explosive ..Yes ...Explosive....(that's my word for today) ...
    If you talk to the fairy could you give her my email addy ...Ive lost my poetic mojo ....If i ever had it ..Did i ....I dont know ....
    You do though ..This was brilliant ...And its one of those poems that will just stick in my mind ...Blessed Be
    | Posted on 2005-03-09 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      oh dear, im back. my muse came back. it's so nice to be sad again<3 now the little faerie is flying again throwing that little glitterdust on my hair and my eyes=cant see anything but glitter-rain. and besides, it looks like my muse-less-ness has served you well: this was something lovely<3 hey i made out with the sweetest rock'n'roll boy. maybe he gave me the little glitterdust. at least a pink crown. let's dance, shall we?
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by _taateli_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute! I liked the hint of darkness in the glitter-word-it made me feel deliciously evil. Your use of old-fashioned English gives the poem a wonderful flavor. I like that it is her own glitter-dust that always her to write; it is a very interior thing.
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by dreamexandra | [ Reply to This ]


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