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    dots Submission Name: Faintdots

    Author: MasterBrad
    ASL Info:    15/M/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 35/51/13
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Me and my girlfriend got into it because i supported a friend of mine that she doesnt like... which pissed me off so bad i started to cry and hit things... I almost fainted when she was trying to talk to me... when we went inside i smoked, and she left me there because she can't stand to see me smoke... I wish that she would try harder to influence me to quit... Sometimes i think she just gets mad at me for it because of something else... anyways... she left me when i needed her the most... I needed her to help and guide me.. but she wasn't there... I love her to death, and I know that she loves me.. Even if she does complain or leave me alone... I said i love you on my way out the door and kissed her on the cheek... she didn't say anything to me... but then she wound up saying it over the phone... so I don't know..

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    I feel a pain inside of me,
    One that only I can see.

    You want to know what is wrong?
    It's all of my feelings twisting inside.

    All of the Love, all of the hate,
    All of the depression, will be my fate.

    I almost fainted outside talking to you,
    Crying and yelling, you helped me.

    When we went inside you sat beside me,
    I smoked a cigarette and you left me there.

    You say you can't stand watching me kill myself,
    When you leave my side, its worse than death.

    How can you help me if you are not there,
    I need you beside of me to change my ways.

    I argue with you over it,
    Waiting to see if we do fit.

    You left me there to faint.

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      Wow....I just don't know what to say to this.....

    Why are you smoking? That's my question...You're only 15 years old. It IS slowly killing you and you need to realize it. I can see why she can't stand it, and when she walks away, it should be enough of a motivation for you to stop. If you love her enough, you will. I don't care how hard it is, how much time it will take. No matter what happens during it, she shouldn't leave your side if you are willing to quit. If she can't satnd there enought o say I love you and care to help you all the way through and help you when you fall, then she's not worth the pain to make you cry.

    You need to stand up, look her in the eye, and say I love you, if she can't say it right back then and there, or give you a good explanatin why she can't say it YET, then give it up. I know how hard this must be to take in, but I want you to know, we're all in situations that others can't handle one way or another. You just need to stand up when you fall, push harder than ever so you don't faint. Push yourself awake to realize whethere she's there or not. If you blink for a moment and she's not there, then you know what you need to do.

    I don't know how much more I Need to write to show you this isn't improving your chances with her. You need to quit smoking and stick with her, or quit her and find someone who will tolerate your smoking. I know there are people out there, but you know what you should do. I'm not going to lead you down my path of righteousness towards god because that is what I believbe. I am going to lead you down your own path to make your own choices and to see whether you can live another day in pain, or do something to make it go away.....
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]

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