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    dots Submission Name: Fuck It and Diesdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 847
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1423



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       excuse the raw language and profanity, but this is as real as writing gets. tell me what you think, in honest, burning terms. don't honey anything, don't patronize me. just comment truthfully and bluntly please


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    dotsFuck It and Diesdots
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    Scared, lost, and forlorn
    Pain is her way
    Her heart is torn
    She sings as her tears drown her eyes
    And in her room no one hears her cry
    As the blades and needles prick her flesh
    Surrounded by the
    Very best
    Light glints off the metal showing fists thrown
    And cussing shouted
    She gets stoned
    The words sharper than the needles
    Pierce through her mind
    No one knows what she feels
    Cause no one knows what itís like
    To have everything
    And still not have what you need
    The only way she forgets it
    Is when she bleeds
    Or throws up the poison thatís
    Making her fat
    Or takes the pills for when sheís ill
    When she isnít that
    For taking blame for whatís not her fault
    Mostly not her fault
    Or is it all her fault?
    To have her life ahead of her
    With possibilities soaring towards the skies
    To hate everything possible
    To think of suicide
    And drinking, sex, and getting high
    What will stop the tears?
    What will numb the pain?
    How much can she afford to lose
    In the winnerís game?
    Slice
    Slice
    Sting the flesh
    Eat a little, throw up the rest
    Cuss, and punch, and kick and cry
    Then after all that, get high
    She says out loud, fuck this, and dies




    Submitted on 2005-03-08 00:56:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       You're 14 too!! Hee hee! hello!

    It's very powerful, this piece, a lot of emotions running through it. But then kinda gets redundant. But hey, who doesn't get redundant?

    I can't bash it. I'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by Nyx Xievenront | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that was moving! That was an awesome poem and a definate favourite. You just summed up my life and everything I do. It's surprising how many people lead the same sort of lives. I can totally relate and I think this was an amazing way of expressing your emotion. Excellent.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]


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