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    dots Submission Name: Hey Stranger...Oh, Strangerdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       for all those who long for what was once theirs


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    dotsHey Stranger...Oh, Strangerdots
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    Hey stranger
    Remember me?
    And this face you used to know?
    The cheeks you pinched, the lips you kissed
    The big eyes that used to glow
    Remember when we used to lie down
    And just held each other close
    And you’d smile at me
    And touch my face
    The one you used to know
    We’d speak of things, of hopes and dreams
    That we’d tell no one else
    And we’d reveal things, secrets and schemes
    Hidden in our mind’s shelves
    But that’s all just a memory
    A long-lost recollection
    Do you ever wonder about me?
    When you take a moment to remember?
    All those times, all those days
    Those Aprils and Decembers
    From then on, it went wrong
    As did our lives apart
    When you hear our song do you sing along?
    It had to end, because it had a start
    When you smell the perfume I used to wear
    Do you spare a thought for me?
    And when you walk in the park, after dark,
    Do you remember being with me?
    Did it all just fade fast away?
    Did you move on quickly?
    Does another girl make you smile?
    Do you share laughter with her?
    Do you keep her warm, and hold her as close
    As you’d shave, like you once did with me?
    Bet you don’t give her piggy-back rides
    Or kiss her upside down
    You don’t sneak chocolate kisses in her pockets
    Or in the summer pretend to drown
    I know you wouldn’t sing to her
    Or dance with her without music
    Like we did that one extra beautiful night
    Alone in the gym, after the dance
    The day you stole my heart and never gave it back
    Oh, I know you don’t make her your special milkshakes
    Or take her horse-back riding
    Or bring her out to the beach
    And romance her as the sun goes down
    Like you did once upon a time with me
    Sometimes I wish
    Those memories were right now, once again
    Oh, stranger, what I would give for you
    To be holding me
    In your arms, in your heart
    Once again, not so strange




    Submitted on 2005-03-08 00:58:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was good and as you said in your decription a lot of people can realte to this. Its an okay poem I liked the rhyme and the structure. I'll look forward to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Broken Dreams | [ Reply to This ]


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