barefoot freefall

Author: russiangopher ASL Info:    18/f/ca Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 10 /8 /4 Words: 55

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barefoot freefall

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Flashback Memories, Sun encloses me, blankets warm as sleep, summer infinity. Bottled apologies, but midnight harmony, rage: it comes and leaves, youth is savagery. Borrowed cigarettes, burned-out silhouettes, dancing, out of breath, remember, no regrets. Barefoot freefall, gravity stalls, water magnatized, close your eyes.

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'rage: it comes and leaves, youth is savagery.' i love these lines. no sugar coating, right to the point. we only get one chance in adolesence and it's full of excitement, fear, touch, a rollercoster of emotions, and this poem is like a glimpse, a slide show of your teenage mind. it's awsome.

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