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    dots Submission Name: NIGHT OF DAY'Sdots

    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
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    dotsNIGHT OF DAY'Sdots

    Throuhgout this life so vast.
    Into the realm of healing fear all
    that pass the blisterd night.
    Invalid reflection melting into whispers of velvet.
    Shy of tense thought.
    Surealistic hauntings upon the dawn,
    so dusk are we in this creation.

    Unbalanced death floats the fear,
    the night slinder of awaking bliss.
    Unfurled time yawnning under the
    lost deed.
    Under the fire wehere souls leap,
    spirits comforting injesting kindle.

    Oh, the feeling of seekness, of light, of one power.
    Oh, the sparkled glow where breaks us all.
    The filter of sage, of seeding need, of none to be. only light, only darkend pray,only in the night of day's

    Submitted on 2005-03-08 06:00:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm faving this because that line is so damn hot. I say hot. It's actually just beautiful.
    Invalid reflection melting into whispers of velvet
    AllyRose x
    | Posted on 2005-10-02 00:00:00 | by AllyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      great great great! and guess what?!?!? i actiually got it! i understood it completely. like what you were trying to say and get across to your readers! welp! im a reader and i got it! im so happy for myself. i think you do so much better in your writings when you dont rhyme. it slike your feelings are so better told to the world because they arent forced by the power or rhyme! great job . adioz.
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by PookiezBookie | [ Reply to This ]

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