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    dots Submission Name: Fuck all of you!dots
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    Author: Broken Dreams
    ASL Info:    16 female Wales
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 116/135/31
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 979
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 391



    Description:
       I just read the typical teen angst thing and just decided to write a typical teen angst poem.


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    dotsFuck all of you!dots
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    Fuck all of you and your lies
    You can keep all of your precious cries
    I donít need to know
    I want to go
    I want to break away
    From the darkness of day
    I canít ever smile again
    Because I canít ever hide my pain
    You made me feel like this
    And now you stand there and take the piss
    Well fuck all of you and your lies.




    Submitted on 2005-03-08 08:44:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey thanx for your comments on previous writes sorry for no discription sometimes i get lost as my pen tells a story of something . tomorrows circles is a suicide write but through my view of losing someone i no who pulled the trigger this post was interesting are you having a bad day anyway keep writing those great thoughts down and i will enjoy reading i just posted yesterdays rain enjoy
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what this poem is about on one level and on another I dont. The poem is very typical as you say, but very new also with fresher angst. A nice try, better than the usual angst poem.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by vvv | [ Reply to This ]


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