Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: If I Ever Felt Alonedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 720
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 509



    Description:
        I just want to say FUCK everyone that wasn't there to comfort me when I was in pain and in sorrow. FUCK everyone who thought I was a criminal, when indeed I was trying to do my best. And FUCK everyone who judged me before getting to know me; because indeed I know that I'm a man with good intentions, though sometimes I leave bad impressions.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIf I Ever Felt Alonedots
    -------------------------------------------


    If upon requesting a star,
    Because my life didn't spark,
    Way in the distance,
    So deeply far,
    I found hope in the dark.

    With no guidelines,
    To follow,
    And no road signs to read,
    Way Deep in the shallows,
    I found my reason to live.

    If I ever felt alone,
    Departed from everyone else;
    With my sorrow as stealth,
    I know I'm not yet done,
    If indeed I have myself,
    To help me carry on.




    Submitted on 2005-03-08 10:51:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I like your poem. I can really relate to it! And the Description you gave, I can really relate because that is exactly how I feel about people "in" my life. Keep it real.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Teshima | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    49609

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    Bond written by saartha
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Push written by JanePlane
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    Incubus written by monad
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    The Promise written by annie0888
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Once Again written by krs3332003

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry