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    dots Submission Name: If I Ever Felt Alonedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Description:
        I just want to say FUCK everyone that wasn't there to comfort me when I was in pain and in sorrow. FUCK everyone who thought I was a criminal, when indeed I was trying to do my best. And FUCK everyone who judged me before getting to know me; because indeed I know that I'm a man with good intentions, though sometimes I leave bad impressions.


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    dotsIf I Ever Felt Alonedots
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    If upon requesting a star,
    Because my life didn't spark,
    Way in the distance,
    So deeply far,
    I found hope in the dark.

    With no guidelines,
    To follow,
    And no road signs to read,
    Way Deep in the shallows,
    I found my reason to live.

    If I ever felt alone,
    Departed from everyone else;
    With my sorrow as stealth,
    I know I'm not yet done,
    If indeed I have myself,
    To help me carry on.




    Submitted on 2005-03-08 10:51:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like your poem. I can really relate to it! And the Description you gave, I can really relate because that is exactly how I feel about people "in" my life. Keep it real.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Teshima | [ Reply to This ]


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