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From the Passive Half of Whole


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It's been awhile since i've posted anything for me Master. Here it is.


From the Passive Half of Whole



I have read of greek Gods
Not half of him.
This man that Narcissus would envy,
Whom Zeus would challenge and fail....
I'll have need of something
To shield me-
Like a ring of fire
And a cloud of smoke.
To give it all away
Just to taste this bliss
And smash everything to pieces
For him to mean this kiss.




Submitted on 2005-03-08 12:16:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a wierd poem but still like it. i would try to ass to it. I argee with loney poet i didn't either get the first two sentences of the poem.
hope to hear from you.
| Posted on 2005-03-09 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was an okay poem but I did really like this part of it

To shield me-
Like a ring of fire
And a cloud of smoke.

I didn't really get the first two sentences of the poem.
| Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by lonely poet | [ Reply to This ]


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