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    dots Submission Name: A Feeling I Hatedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 917
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    Description:
       This is a confusion of thoughts, had to get it out, had to write something down, not sure if I like it so if you have any thoughts please let me know.Anyone else ever feel like this? Can you tell me what it is?


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    dotsA Feeling I Hatedots
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    this is another feeling I hate
    I miss you
    should I waste these tears or just let you go
    should I bother to care anyway

    the world that lives outside my head looks in
    are you dissapointed at what you have found
    I am hurt
    I am angry
    I miss you
    if I stop the tears
    I will burn up inside
    but I am afraid of what will happen if I let myself cry
    so ashamed
    I miss you
    what will happen to me now that you have gone away




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      whoo..don't know how many times i've felt what this poem is talking about! I guess i feel it every day...i ask myself every day if i'm wasting tears...or if i should even bother to care, and every day i answer yes to those questions. To answer the last line of ur poem...what's happened now that that person has gone away..is..ur gonna become a stronger person. You won't die...even thought it mite feel like it :) but..u'll just be a better, stronger person for going throught it. and hopefully it all works out! Really good write!
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I think everyone feels like this at some point..I know I have. As for the poem I liked it, I didn't like it at first, but the last stanza really brought it all together.
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this. I think its a universal feeling to lose someone you loved. I felt like this about my first girlfriend. It still hurts a little bit when I see her at school everyday also.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by AFireInside01 | [ Reply to This ]
      i enjoyed this and it soudns to me that you miss him and want him back but its not that you can have him its that you cant let yourself have him. im guessing that by urting you he has changed your mind on how great he is but that didnt make you stop loving him and all you want is for things to go back to normal and never chnge. ive felt this before and it sucks but it will fade in time.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      I also loved reading this, it's dark and very relateable. It's very sad, I like that it makes you feel something.-BRONZEBIRD19-
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by Bronzebird19 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved reading this aloud, it's very, very sad. Some great descriptions of the pushing and pulling of love (should I, are you, if I). I really liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-08 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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