Twins separated somewhere in the stars,
One on a thirty-year delay,
The other so willing to help her get there.
With words. stories. trips. laughs. memories.
Connection.
Whether it's rummaging through books to find a treasure
Or visiting the ghost towns of Pennsylvania,
Chinese eyes meet ocean blue,
Curiousity meets discovery,
A surreal moment in time is born,
The Pooh-and-Piglet system goes on.
Camaraderie knows no age.
You're not just another "Miss" to me;
You are my carbon copy.
I thought this was written really well for a first draft. Seems as though you two have definately bonded. I'm sure you've noticed a lot of writers use no punctuation whatsoever. I think it's important if you want the next word to really stand out. So it's pretty much personal preference. I liked the theme of this poem. You actually could emiminate the word "with" in the fourth line, it would kind of accentuate the list. If you do that, use a semi-colon after the last word in the third line. Read it aloud to yourself, that should help you decide where you need the punctuation. Good job though, keep it up., Carol
Submission Name: Carbon Copy
