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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots
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    Author: Judy
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 579/569/93
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       (Inspired by a friend's account of a Biking Expedition in the Himalayan Mountain range)


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    The air is cold
    the dawn pink and Crisp
    Mist still hangs in the air
    Beyond which
    The snow capped mountain range
    Beckons
    like Magic waiting to unfold

    Sipping steaming hot spiced tea
    I Listen to the murmur of leaves
    the flight of birds
    and to a world that's just waking up

    Jacket zipped, helmet clicked
    The bike and I get on the road
    It stretches out-
    a pitch-dark Black River
    full of possibilities

    The wind rushes by
    but it's a Gentle breeze
    Compared to the Whirlwind I feel inside

    Listening to the Mountains
    speaking with the Wisdom of a million years,
    I leave the world behind
    And breathe Life




    Submitted on 2004-03-31 10:17:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well written. I could just picture the scene - clean and beautiful up in the mountains - you described it so well...but I think you should have given it a bit of rhythm...that would make the poem more interesting.....
    Good write. : ) : )
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery! It makes me want to be there. I love the description of the road, and the last stanza is wonderful. I especially love the line "speaking with the Wisdom of a million years,". Great job capturing the experience, I could easily believe you'd done it yourself.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]
      i think i ecpressed my veiws about this earlier but i just want to say that this is a favorite easily, and hell, i love this poem as well. wink wink, damn that tea sounds goood right about now
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      A very beautiful cleansing lines. I enjoyed reading it. You hav managed to capture the singular beauty of these mountains. I think I am more of a mountain man and I enjoy being with it. Makes your little worries fell kinda insignificant.
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by smart_yak | [ Reply to This ]
      Judy this is absolutely lovely--no fantastically beautiful. I live in an area reknown for it's cycling -- along the paths that were once railway beds---through magnificent passes and virgin forest, ghost "whistle-stops"--over trestles and through tunnels--and there isn't a single cyclist on that trail who wouldn't treasure this poem. Thank you, thank you Silver
    | Posted on 2004-03-31 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]



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