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    dots Submission Name: Nightmaredots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 15/40/30
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsNightmaredots
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    I have tried to run away
    Tried to forget the pain, the memories.
    But somehow, they won't let me forget any of it.

    The screaming, the crying...
    It just won't go away.
    They scream 'You're always alone!'
    I simply reply, blinded by the tears 'get out of my head...just leave me alone already.'

    Right there, I felt weak and all I could do, was cry
    The laughter that filled the room had disappeared

    I woke up and found myself, not in my room but some place else binded by the chains.

    The screams that peirced the room, was so heart aching...
    You couldn't help by cover your ears and close your eyes, trying so hard to shut out the noise.

    'They told me to scream. To scream till I collapsed and they told me to cry. To cry till I did something about my life.'
    I closed my eyes and said a silent prayer, hoping someone would hear it and grant it.




    Submitted on 2005-03-09 22:35:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice and alive though it could use some more... hmm... symbolism. ^.^; I think if you just concentrated more and tried to put all of these into different words it would be much better.
    | Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by Nyx Xievenront | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok...you are seriously talented! Your poem is extremely wise and mature. I read thru the words and felt like I was in there too. And, believe me girlie...I ain't into the "goth" mode. This is VERY good! What an impact on me it had. KEEP WRITING and writing and writing and writing...
    | Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by Xsiv | [ Reply to This ]



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