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    dots Submission Name: She my anitodedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsShe my anitodedots
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    Your my antidote
    your the one who keep me from going back to the drugs
    that once held my life.

    Every time I see you
    my heart skips a beat.

    You’re my antidote
    you’re the only one who kept me from jumping from the ledge.
    Your there when I need you the most

    You're my antidote
    When you are there
    I have no fear.
    I'm so weak with out your touch.

    Your my antidote
    I stare into you're eyes
    they glistens like dimanods in will lit room.

    You're the one and the only
    I share my love with.

    your my antidote
    Your touch stop me from me grabing the knife
    that i want to so bad
    but you're here even if it gets bad




    Submitted on 2005-03-10 09:34:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like that last stanza. I wish I meant that much to someone. ^_^ some of it was a bit off because the last two words were the same on the last stanza.
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by ShadowAlchemist | [ Reply to This ]
      totally opposite of a poem i wrote not to long ago...instead of him bein my antidote...he was my addicting drug...i like the flow...and the way you decided to write this...
    | Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]


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