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    dots Submission Name: A Valley of Shadowdots
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    Author: dax
    ASL Info:    35 male BC Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 127/127/42
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Valley of Shadowdots
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    A valley echos
    the haunting call.
    Of Scotland pipes
    with mournful cries.
    For fallen brave,
    still as winter's leaves.
    Crumpled in the hands
    of another's life.
    Lasses weaping
    in the rain.
    Kissing frozen lips
    a last good-bye.
    Songs of birds
    displaced by grief.
    Bloodied banner
    flies proudly high.
    Victory bought
    and sold for souls.
    The day extinguished
    like a gasping breath.

    January 21, 2005




    Submitted on 2005-03-10 20:40:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      DDDDDAAAAAAAAXXXXXXXXXX!!!!!!

    how the bloody hell are ya?
    its been a while,
    glad i ran in to this write of yours.
    war
    battle
    victory
    sighs
    crying
    crippling affects
    the lies
    i got all this from this piece.
    what inspired it if you do not mind.

    good to read ya

    paulie d
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sure at least I'd be willing toi bet thattherre is succh a place. I am ppersonally getting siuck of this same stle poetry it's justthat everyone and there grandmother writes like"and the tormenting sound of the passer byers reminds me of autumn in july"
    Now that might not be word for w2ord but it;s damn close it's like why make me work for truth here this poem /your poem didn't but I started getting the feeling it wsas about to go on a tare of things yhat make senslesses best definituion for me and my dictionary anyway keep it up but don't write like everyone else write what you like but don';t always write whats right!~L.t
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a very good poem. It makes me really sad though. It makes me feel as though everytime we get close we have to say goodbye..that no matter what good has come of something I will always have to say goodbye..which is true. but still. This is a very good poem..i wish that i could write like you..you are very talented, i cant wait to read some of your other poems..keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]



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