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    dots Submission Name: Shutting Doorsdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is an old poem written a few years back, but I still like it, so hopefully you will too


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    dotsShutting Doorsdots
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    My tears dampen my clothing
    My eyes searching, my heart yearns
    If I could be in your arms, Iíd feel a
    Sense of belonging
    But life is funny the way it turns

    Love is found, but destiny closes the doors
    Or more like slams it in
    My face
    My heart is and always was yours
    But I will never feel your tender embrace
    Lost in a sea
    Of popularity and ďstuffĒ
    Will it ever be me
    That you cherish and love?

    The nights Iíve spent dreaming
    The days Iíve spent crying
    While the love with which youíre steaming
    Is why you hear sobs and constant sighing
    When you ask for so little
    And donít get a lot
    All I wanted was for you to love me
    Battles between heart and brain have stopped

    I cannot have you
    I canít be yours
    But I can still love you
    No more open doors
    Forever resigned
    To live life with you as just a friend
    Her laughter rings, while the tears are mine
    Even now the love wonít end

    Why wont you meet my gaze?
    Accept the love you see in them
    Or is this just a phase
    Or maybe it just depends
    On the depth of my love
    My loveís purity
    I pray to God above
    Only the heavens comfort me




    Submitted on 2005-03-11 00:06:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I've noticed that all of your work has fantasatic imagery. Keep it up! It seem as though you put a lot of effort in you writing as well!
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      loved it sorry for such a short comment great imagery but i feel like you haven't really had any experience with love but to tell you the truth i still love this poem 10 out of 10
    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by Lucy L. | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem was really nice. I really enjoyed it. I'm adding it to my favorites.You must have worked really hard on it! Good job!

    ~Rabi~
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]


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