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    dots Submission Name: A Battle of Love and Reasondots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       another old poem, but oldies are classics

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    dotsA Battle of Love and Reasondots

    What I wonder is not what Iím facing
    But I think of it anyway
    Across the room pacing and pacing
    Wanting to tell you what I canít say

    My feelings and emotions
    On a short leash bound to me
    My fear of the commotion
    They would cause if I set them free

    I hit them back with mental stones
    And wash them with a think-of-nothing flood
    But they just shout louder what Iíve known
    That the greatest of all these is love

    The truth stands bare and naked
    In the damned harshness of my heart
    While in my head war is raging
    Where does love end and start?

    My heart battles fiercely with passion
    My mind coldly reasons it out
    My brain is winning with a brutal lashing
    But my heart remains steadfast and stout

    Tired of the pain I feel constantly
    Tired of the reliable hurt in my eyes
    Tired of how I need you, and will always probably
    Tired of the rumors, gossip and lies

    In the middle of a soap opera, this is just the start
    O God, please, help me, I pray
    Iíve given him my heart
    Why do I have a feeling itís going to be thrown away?

    Itís all over; itís all done
    I was wrong
    The battleís won
    Love doesnít conquer, it taunts you then goes along

    Submitted on 2005-03-11 00:09:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow! this is a great write.there's so much truth into it.though it is sad,sometimes love doesnt always conquer and you put your thoughts about it into great use in this piece.good job! i can relate to this...
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by black_joker1292 | [ Reply to This ]
      GREAT use of imagery. It really makes your poem come to life!Your thoughts are also very clear, and to me it's very original.
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]

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