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    dots Submission Name: The dry oceandots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Triggered by the wind in the trees


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    dotsThe dry oceandots
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    Green gossips whisper together
    Bustling, rustling
    Leaves; no sound from here.
    Watched in silence
    They dance to the rhythm
    of an invisible current.
    Waving at me through
    A see-through sea
    of dry water.

    Up here this land
    Seems oceans apart
    From the blueness of the deep.
    Yet we all swim in an invisble sea
    trying to stay afloat,
    Keeping our heads above water
    Our mouths fish-like,
    Flapping to be heard
    lest we drown.




    Submitted on 2005-03-11 09:46:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Instresting, very, very instresting.... it is philospohical and has a touch of emotional longing...
    well written friend!!
    Regards'
    Umay

    ok i didnt want to write any further, but the webmaster is like "show some respect"... he should understand that writting lengthy comments doesnt really mean a good comment and also that a single sentence is capable of conveying more info than a para...
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]


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