Description: It seems this is all I write about. No, I am not a perv, just a hopeless romantic.
What Am I? -------------------------------------------
Enveloped in waves, she heaves
Rapid fire succession, uncontrollable
Let go, surrender to my touch
Dull ache of courseing blood
Lightheadness, the mind is consumed
Unrelenting crashes on the shore
I really like this. Short, powerful descriptive words, and not perverted. It's totally romantic. :) The only think that gives me the creeps is the "heaves" part. haha Maybe because it's not as beautiful or impressive as the other words. Overall it's was really passionate and loving without getting down right nasty about it. Great job! -blt :)
After knowing all that you been through with your relationship and now having that powerful,sensual lusting love being awaken once again. You have every right to write about it as much as you want. No sensuality will never make you a perv.
Your poem speaks clearly of a renewed passion that laid dormant for years, but now Zeus might be getting jealous of you,lol
I enjoyed reading this. The one line that stands out to me is "Unrelenting crashes on the shore" it reminds me of the old movies, when they would cut the love scene and show endless waves rushing in. I can tell, you are definately a hopeless romantic. Carol
A sweet, smooth read. (except for a misspelling with courseing=coursing)
What am I? I'm guessing the answer is passion, too.
Passionate, not just sexual. The understated way you present it underlines this, I think. Not just a one-night stand kind of f<cking, if you know what I mean. I believe its that passion that separates a romantic from a perv. and makes an understated erotic poem better than blatant smut.
This is a good piece but its sort of confusing you should elaborate more and if you dont you should include a description. THe thing that i thought needs work is the end, its a bit too loose. with work i think it will be better. hope this helps i like the topic though why did you choose to name your poem "who am I?"