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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Once upon a time
    In my prime
    I ate a lime
    I squeezed it
    Into a cup
    And I drank it up
    It was sour
    A little sweet
    My face melted
    Into a dream
    As I . . . .




    Submitted on 2005-03-11 19:45:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was cool and yet again I wish I could keep this comment simple, I likes the [censored] poem, I liked the [censored] poem, I likes the [censored] poem...Dude this one was cool.Buh Bye.
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I really can't figure out why I like this so much! I wish you'd finish the last line, though, I hate guessing games...For some reason, well done...
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Simple but great. I loved this...It is now one of my newest favorits. It is so complex but yet so simple...Keep writeing..And remeber: Everything in life is never going to be perfect, that is why we spend are whole life trying to perfect it, when we could really be enjoying it and savoring the life that we have. ~Llama Luver~
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]


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