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    dots Submission Name: Someday I'll Flydots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 843
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    Description:
       im not sure if this is more lyrics or poetry, but this is more uplifting than I expected it be. To inspire all the teens out there who knows what it's like to go through true pain. Hang in there


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    dotsSomeday I'll Flydots
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    I'll try to spread my wings and be pushed high up
    Don't think what you say matters, I've been hurt enough
    Pain fogs my vision, but I soar right on by
    No matter how difficult, I'll learn how to fly

    Friendships that shatter cut through my skin
    Parents that judge wrongly blow away my wind
    Days I dream away, and the nights that I cry
    No matter what it takes, I'll learn how to fly

    Heartaches keep my two feet on the ground
    Beatings and criticism put me back down
    Love that I can't have, stares straight into my eyes
    No matter how it hurts, I'll learn how to fly

    Someday I'll find, my sky paradise
    Where I can be free to be as I please
    I won't need the cutting to ease away the pain
    I won't need the drinking to forget all my days
    And no more drugs to lift me from heavy reality
    I won't need to run from where my home should be
    I won't feel tears gathering in my eyes
    The walls of my room, no more will hear my cries
    Bruises on my arms will fade fast away
    I won't feel fear. or rage, or pain
    I'll be saved
    When I fly away
    Cause

    I'll spread my wings, and soar above it all
    Life goes so fast, so treasure it all
    Heartbreaks, pain, drugs, drinking, no matter what I'll try
    And despite of it all, someday I'll fly







    Submitted on 2005-03-11 19:51:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      man is this a great write! its so inspirational.i love it! everything fell into place,the wording was good,good use of imagery and a great deal of details.very good! and i too hope that someday you will fly and be happy...
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by black_joker1292 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm, so true. I think that this could use some rythem work, but otherwise, this is good. These lyrics (aside from the second to last stanza) rally illustrated how I feel. keep em' coming.
    | Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by whiteshadows | [ Reply to This ]


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