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Author: diabolicmaggot ASL Info:    16/f/The depths of hell Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 15 /26 /11 Words: 7

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Mute calamity Divine brutal massacre Immortal rancor

Submitted on 2005-03-11 21:44:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Great usage of adjectives but I think this piece could be better. Give it some more meat... let the reader in on your thoughts Crackwalker

| Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]

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