Description: ok, i edited it a little bit, but its still a work in progress...
Nymph -------------------------------------------
And there I saw her,
A flower on the river of femininity
All together unchanged by time,
Flowing freely on the tide she revels
Capers and smiles to the secret thoughts
dancing in her head
Happy, content in being a woman
Mother of reason, gilt in gold
Lilt in the sound of the wind.
i thought this was very lovely. packed with nice vocab. [[A flower on the river of femininity]] i loved that metaphor. i always try to think of things like that, like "he was a zit on the face of humanity" or something but i can never do it. i dont have any suggestions because i cant find anything to change :) sophie
Okay, this is playful and childlike in nature, good write. It seems to be in touch with your true self. Though it didn't touch me as much as it might touch a woman perhaps, I still saw the beauty in it. Thanks. -sin
I agree with romesgal on the flower thing but feel that this is an excellent poem, full of substance and feeling. finding the woman within. I think it does pack a punch at the end.
'Happy, content in being a woman Mother of reason, gilt in gold Lilt in the sound of the wind.'
Submission Name: Nymph
