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    dots Submission Name: Releaseddots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       For those of you who have read some of my work you will recognize the common theme of this piece. But mostly I think here I finally have been able to put into words my true feelings. This helps the healing, to see in print my years of unhappiness, then the light of my love is remarkable for rebirth.

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    Adrift in a wasteland borne in despair
    Fermented emotions, spoiled are there
    Hopeless actions entwined in chains
    Bears witness of bondage and pain
    The daily charade of duty engrained
    Blended worthlessness of surrender unstrained

    Applied hopelessness I muddle in synch
    As in a desert I thirst for drink
    Outward the appearance of a contented spouse
    Clashed mightily by the presence of the grouse
    Prostitute inner worth, mute my vigor
    Replaced by platitudes of marital rigor

    A singular spark outside the constraint
    Ignited the fuse, release the restraint
    Two decades of quell stack up the wall
    Practiced denial, I dismiss it all
    The spark stays lit, to refute impossible
    To find love again, allow the plausible

    The dam is burst, the torrents cascade
    My world splayed open to love she made
    Unjail the emotion, commute the disdain
    Break free my torment, she ceased the pain
    On eagles wings I soar, opens the world
    For now my heart swells, my love unfurled

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      Very nicely done. I like the rhyme scheme, but then rhyme is my favorite. This flows nicely. It's so difficult putting on the happy face when deep inside its just the opposite. I'm glad for you that finally your time has come. You've written it out well.
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the imegry and the complations. i would check a few grammer irrose which i myself am horrable at so i dare trade carefully pointing others out. i love the sense of reless in the end and maybe its because i am young but i dont understand the whole bondage thing with older people. like i get it with my generation and i am not saying your old. i bet you are laughting at this. i would be. anyways
    i like it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]

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