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    dots Submission Name: Blush Stained Cocoondots
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    Author: serpentarius
    ASL Info:    18/m/Melbourne
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 97/80/23
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBlush Stained Cocoondots
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    Bordering likeness in a moonlight trancer,
    Seldom does a consonant invoke matter
    Nor the mastery of magnificence
    However, still as poetic as macabre

    That is why the girl waltzes with a rapier,
    Romancing eddy doodle dandy doo
    Until a torniquet for them by the fancier
    And leave her behind not even a reminder

    Dulcimers placate the cirrus evening
    With a tune only four bars long,
    But repeated with a lengthy plucking
    None a lady could hammer this on

    So insect hides, exposing a silky cover
    Only to steal the blood that it discovers
    To be its own, and not translucent
    Not God's own, not even from its mother...




    Submitted on 2005-03-12 21:42:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I just had to comment on this because no one else has. What a shame. Alot of people are so wrapped up in themselves. I am guilty too, I suppose. I really loved the wordsmithing here. or word weaving. My favorite lines (and I don't know why for sure)

    That is why the girl waltzes with a rapier,
    Romancing eddy doodle dandy doo

    Dulcimers placate the cirrus evening
    With a tune only four bars long,
    But repeated with a lengthy plucking
    None a lady could hammer this on

    very lovely. hope to hear some more from you.
    | Posted on 2005-03-20 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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