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To Be Number One

Author: diabolicmaggot
ASL Info:    16/f/The depths of hell
Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 15 /26 /11
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This is some of my thoughts on the world today and how people do all these things to get monet or to simply be the best. Its horrible.

To Be Number One

Insignificant people
Striving to prove yourself
Desire to be number one
Abhor everyone
Quarrel with your neighbor
Dauntless beings
The awry world in total chaos
Uncover the secrets of life
Outwit your opponents
Betray your friends
The plagued world of imperfections
Wise to the truth
What would you do to be number one?

Submitted on 2005-03-13 09:57:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  OMG.. i love it.. i seriously like it very much i specially like the part of Betraying your friends... i do ask myself that.... what ppl do just to be better or be number one.... the things they do...make me sick.. i really like this poem...i'll happily read more of ur poems, i loved it..congratulations
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey,I thought this was good.How you described what most people do to get where they want,even though they run all over people,it sucks but it's true
| Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]

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