I love the play on words in this. Sorry I can't be more constructive, but I think you've done a great job. The only real improvement I could suggest is to maybe use "sand" instead of "sands" towards the end. I enjoyed this, thanks.
I like the originality of your form in this poem. It lends itself well to the subject matter. I found myself lingering on in this poem re-arranging words, seeking a deeper meaning. And that is what good poetry should elicit. I enjoy the imagery in this, paired with an overall simplicity makes the piece feel very eloquent. Nice write.
your love for the Son is so apparent in most of your writing. it really is a beautiful expression. i love the turquoise and blue colours you speak of... i sure wish everyone thought this way. we could have heaven on earth, couldn't we? thank you for sharing your love and peace with all of us.