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    dots Submission Name: Distinct Inferioritydots

    Author: Brwnsknsam05
    ASL Info:    32/F/ Cuba
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 399/440/103
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is how I have developed how my family all of them...blood or not have evolved. This is who I am. A mix breed. Enjoy

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    dotsDistinct Inferioritydots

    Who AM I!
    I am a product of you…
    Look at me…
    Look at you…

    Pale brown skin
    Brown eyes
    Full lips
    And a honey spirit
    Simple characteristics…
    You have
    Tears fall down
    Your small face
    Leaving salty stains behind

    Your crushed freedom
    Away from the abuse
    The hurt and the pain
    The sorrow her heart feels

    As it wakes for tomorrow

    A bitter day is how
    She is scorn
    Ripped, torn, hit
    Is how you were borne
    The disaster child
    Brown skin
    And honey fingers
    Tender smiles
    Small features
    Little bundle
    Was she…
    Were you…
    Borne to slavery
    Servitude and loyalty
    Bond by birth
    Until death
    To be beaten
    Carmel skin bruised
    Battered and ruined
    A father’s sin
    America’s little secret
    And I am a mirror image of you
    America…bow down
    I have arrived

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      Sounds like somebody needs a hug lol. Nah this is good tho. I like how the repetition came back like that cuz to me it seemed like a symphony crescendoing. Its funny how alot of ppl won't ever get how history sticks with blacks who stay black - history from 200 years ago or from 20. I think all that one can hope is that somehow they have the ability to remember they history, but not force they own offspring to kno it - tell the stories and don't relive em i guess.
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds bitter, and hurt. but at the same time it has this striking defiance in it, which i did like. and it does apply to the greater reference..which is america, i thought that was fantastic. the cycle is introduced, the cycle of generations, mine just happens to be different...but similar...if that makes sense. great write though. take care..i'mthinking of you, all the way over here

    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice peice, not only does it give characteric feeling and depth but it isn't boring and dull like most young poetry that simple is about being depressed. In fact if a am not mistaken it could work in multiple eras. Currently, I am reading Jubilee and I get a sence that you have read it too, because alot of the same elements in your writing seem to be in the book. Those are my thoughts anyway and I khope to be reading more from you!

    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by Akai_oni | [ Reply to This ]

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