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    dots Submission Name: He Makes Her Feel Beautifuldots

    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHe Makes Her Feel Beautifuldots

    He makes her feel beautiful.
    His touches are passionate, soft
    So very soft and sweet.
    His deft fingertips send amazing chills down her spine, causing her hairs to curl and her breath is caught in her throat.
    she runs her own fingers throw her mussed hair
    Quiet, gaspy moans escape from her slightly parted lips.
    His soft touches tease and tantalize her dark smooth skin
    Only dark and smooth, because he sees her that way.
    All these feelings he conjures with just his fingertips.
    He says her lips are incredibly soft
    Like rose petals or silk.
    Or silk rose petals, wrapped in velvet...
    Maybe something softer.
    His kisses are addictive
    Like some forbidden drug
    With an unbearably amazing euphoria,
    a beautiful, sinful rapture.

    But sin never felt so good.

    And she's never been so sure
    That she doesn't want to be right
    That she doesnt want to be anything other than....

    Submitted on 2005-03-13 21:53:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved it alot, definitly putting this on my favorites list. This poem really makes you feel it.
    Bloodwing was right this is amazing.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Bronzebird19 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see everything, it's almost like I can feel what they feel. I am very impressed. I don't believe that I have read anything quite like it. I mean, I have read love and passion junk before, but this is amazing. I don't know; maybe I am just novice.

    Almost sincerely,
    This dramatic suicide
    | Posted on 2005-03-13 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      O wow..i LOVE this. You captured me...really u did. I felt like was watching something rather than reading it and it made me feel like i was there with these people. The words...the idea...the thoughts...they were beautiful...this is definitely becoming a fave...awesome job!
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]

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