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    dots Submission Name: Vanitydots
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    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 218
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 559



    Description:
       where to began
    firt almost this entire peice was writen be somebody else.
    the frist parts where taken from a poem called "A Dilogu Between the Soul and Body."
    and the quote is from Job 9 in the bible.
    then the little part in there is mine.
    it is not finished but i wanted to know if it is too complicated and too wordy to understand.
    looking at all of it has helped me however with some thing.
    but lot me know what you think thanks


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    dotsVanitydots
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    I feel, that I cannot feel, the pain
    And all my care itself employs.
    That to preserve which me distroys.
    And wanting where it is spite to try
    Has made me live to let me die.
    "If I say' I will forget my complaint,
    I will put off my sad face and wear a smile" of paint.
    Which knowledge forces me to know
    that vanity is lifes regal show.
    Circumstances are perpetually by and by
    And "love" (agape) is the greatest high.









    Submitted on 2005-03-13 22:11:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the wording in this poem. You take a subject that is such a subject of today (although, it was of long ago, too), and put an older style of wording to it. Very poetic and cool. Good job!

    Peace
    Indigo
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      That was really well done...a good analysis of how appearances rule society, but how true love overcomes all things, especially the love of God.
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Dipsomniac | [ Reply to This ]
      i just read your messages, and your poem "vanity" and like everyone else i think is GREAT...but i wanna read moreeeee!!!

    i really liked the song like melody, felt the "vanity"but i really enjoyed the sweet zing it has in each and every line...

    like a sugar coated bad taste candy...
    uh god! m hungry..lolz... but ya i would like to read the WHOLE LONG thing!!

    tc& keep rhyming
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by electro_cutes | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! good poem, i really liked it. it had a good flow and vocabulary use. however, to me the rhyming seemed somewhat forced!
    other then that, great job and keep up the good work.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]



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