moment in time
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this is not really done.. still needs a bit of work to capture the moment....
moment in time
There is a moment in time when everything is quiet, calm, at peace; and then slam. That moment sinks, and disapears, comes tears,and fears. All that was bright, is gone, nowhere to run. no escape the choas, the smoke, the pain. a wall of rain. Left with the memory of one moment in time. before the choas. |
Submitted on 2005-03-14 01:03:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really enjoyed this piece, it reminds me of life, and how quickly it can turn on a dime. I like the way the poem flows and how the reader can understand your meaning easily. Keep up the good work!| | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ] | I liked this one too. But my present condition kinda lends itself to heartbreak poems. you never really appreciate how good life is until it turns into a twisted mess and then things really seem insignificant compared to your pain. | | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ] | Awwwwww the pain of passion and misunderstandings and the ensuing fight. Aern't relationships a war in themselves at times. I get the imprssion theres more war than calm in this poem. I enjoyed the read, and I felt the emotion, and it gave me pictures too. Thanks | | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ] | this was really very well done and one of the best poems I've read on this site ina while! | your theme was one I could relate to, and your imagery was very nice. I also liked how you kept it profoundly simple and didn't overdo things. | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ] | |
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