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moment in time


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 60
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this is not really done.. still needs a bit of work to capture the moment....


moment in time



There is a moment in time
when everything is quiet, calm,
at peace;
and then
slam.
That moment sinks, and disapears,
comes tears,and fears.
All that was bright, is gone,
nowhere to run.
no escape the choas,
the smoke, the pain.
a wall of rain.
Left with the memory
of one moment in time.
before the choas.




Submitted on 2005-03-14 01:03:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really enjoyed this piece, it reminds me of life, and how quickly it can turn on a dime. I like the way the poem flows and how the reader can understand your meaning easily. Keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one too. But my present condition kinda lends itself to heartbreak poems. you never really appreciate how good life is until it turns into a twisted mess and then things really seem insignificant compared to your pain.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwwwww the pain of passion and misunderstandings and the ensuing fight. Aern't relationships a war in themselves at times. I get the imprssion theres more war than calm in this poem. I enjoyed the read, and I felt the emotion, and it gave me pictures too. Thanks
| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really very well done and one of the best poems I've read on this site ina while!
your theme was one I could relate to, and your imagery was very nice.
I also liked how you kept it profoundly simple and didn't overdo things.
| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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