There is a moment in time
when everything is quiet, calm,
That moment sinks, and disapears,
comes tears,and fears.
All that was bright, is gone,
nowhere to run.
no escape the choas,
the smoke, the pain.
a wall of rain.
Left with the memory
of one moment in time.
before the choas.
| I really enjoyed this piece, it reminds me of life, and how quickly it can turn on a dime. I like the way the poem flows and how the reader can understand your meaning easily. Keep up the good work!||| Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ] || I liked this one too. But my present condition kinda lends itself to heartbreak poems. you never really appreciate how good life is until it turns into a twisted mess and then things really seem insignificant compared to your pain.||| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ] || Awwwwww the pain of passion and misunderstandings and the ensuing fight. Aern't relationships a war in themselves at times. I get the imprssion theres more war than calm in this poem. I enjoyed the read, and I felt the emotion, and it gave me pictures too. Thanks||| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ] || this was really very well done and one of the best poems I've read on this site ina while!|
your theme was one I could relate to, and your imagery was very nice.
I also liked how you kept it profoundly simple and didn't overdo things.
|| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ] |