Clever, I like the way it was put together, the flow of it is good overall although in some section could work a little better: Just one little correction however, the third last piece was misspelt. But other than that i thought the overall piece of writing was well done: Dave
I really like how you put this peace, whoops, piece together. It's truly unique to what I've seen and is some very good work. Again, this is truly remarkable how you did this and made it make sense. Keep up the good work!
Well, this is punny. I'm fond of wordplay, and I like this, but I think it might be too much of a good thing. Maybe it would be better if this were less dense with rhyme and homophones, it might have more of an impact. I'd put a comma after "piece by piece." There are a few places where you don't have anything at the end of lines that I think you need semicolons, so I'd check to see if the lines are complete sentences and choose appropriate punctuation accordingly.