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    dots Submission Name: This boydots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThis boydots

    This boy looks into the mirror
    He wishes he could disappear
    you look into his eyes
    you see the pain and the rage.
    This boy now wishes he could fly away.
    He starts trying to drink all his problems away.
    All he wants is to be free.
    Hes been told that he going fail for his whole
    Now they get a suicidal kid
    This boy is now in the bathroom
    He stares in to the mirror
    he can't stand his reflection
    He shatters the mirror
    The glass fly into the air
    like a winter day in Alaska.
    The boy grabs the biggest piece of glass he can find
    he's trying to end his life
    The glass go into his wrist
    opening his skin like a
    knife going though butter.
    The kid is found on the floor
    he is cold.
    His mother walks in she frozen she can't talk or walk because of the site she see
    Her baby boy lays there in his own blood.
    The paramedic comes but it's to late
    the boy is gone.
    Now you look into his eyes
    you see the pain and the rage is gone.
    The mother can't stand that her baby would do this.
    She can't take it anymore.
    She wants to be with her son.
    She grabs the bottle of pills.
    She hopes she doesn't live.
    Here final word.
    Will he recognize me in heaven?
    She falls over.
    The paramedic sees the pain and the hurt ness is still there even though gone with here son.

    Submitted on 2005-03-14 09:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was a very sad poem. it kinda made me cry. sometimes i want to kill myself but i just take the hope that i can find and hold on to it for as long as i can.
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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