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    dots Submission Name: The Little Me Insidedots
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    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 835
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    Description:
       hmm. well, md, here you've got the dolly^_^ something i wrote in such a happy state that made me almost unhappy. smth weird. bizarre. strange. pull my ropes.


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    dotsThe Little Me Insidedots
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    the weirdest feeling
    something touching
    you
    or the me
    inside and out
    everywhere
    oh,
    it was just the darkness
    with the pink crown
    the gloomy light of the
    moon
    in my room
    the music screaming
    or whispering
    something beating
    or loving
                  me
    a bizarre dolly
    on the floor
                  in the corner
    forgotten
    the sweet little dolly
    with the ropes on her
    wrists
    play with it
    tease it
    fuck it
    do something with it
    hey, it's something strange
    [the feeling]
    but then again
    oh,
    it was just the me
    come to be
    it.

    it's so dark on the other side.




    Submitted on 2005-03-14 12:06:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      O.o the dollie poem i requested! Yay! Soooo awesome Miss T... I don't even know if I got the stalk alert- because I was surprised when I saw you had a new post- the last line is exquisite. one thing- 'in' should be 'on' in the line 'ropes in her wrists'... wonderful piece- satisfactorily sick and pretty. *md*
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the way that you wrote this..it isnt very common that you find a poem that is written in this style..i really like it..so is this how you feel? that you have a little you..but it is dark on the other side..i am just trying to understand where you came from when writing this poem..that is very good.
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write good job i agree very nice write it made me want more i was amazed at the details and intrest you put in this good job again hope to here more from you
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by Psmurf_Bass | [ Reply to This ]


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