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    dots Submission Name: feardots
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    Author: Krinchinian
    ASL Info:    20/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164/231/84
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 927
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this is a poem i wrote at the point in my life when it hit rock bottom..i was in love w/ this older guy...and i was to dumb and blind...to see that he was only out to hurt me and my feelings


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    You tell me lies and I listen
    You tell me you love me
    You tell me you care about me
    You tell me you'll never hurt me
    And i should of ran
    Everything you said was a lie
    So i cried
    You brough me fear
    That made me tear
    Everything I'm against
    Was in you
    Burning so bright
    But i was blinded by your beauty
    I couldn't see the dark side of you
    The one that said to leave you
    The one that said not to care
    The one that said to keep my heart
    Not to let it be broken by you
    But now i see
    Your not the one for me
    Now i see your just there
    To make me fall
    To break my heart
    I let myself be hurt by you
    I gave you my heart and soul
    And you broke it into a million pieces
    But now its mended again
    By someone who cares about me
    And doesn't lie about it
    And i wont make the same mistake twice




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