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    dots Submission Name: Hiddendots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 888
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I had to write a letter to my friend b/c he has a crush on me, but I have a crush on someone else, so as I was writing, it started coming in poem form...


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    Do you know why I hide behind my walls?
    They're so steady and so pure
    It's the only thing I can trust
    Because everyone else turns away

    I'm scared of losing in a world of all wins
    In a world of much pain
    I'm scared far more than you can imagine
    Scared more than death itself

    I've counted the times
    I've lost all my sweethearts
    The boyfriends I had
    Left with pieces of my shattered heart

    It hurts too much
    That I can't rip those pieces back
    They've been thrown into the trash
    And not in a safe place

    My eyes run dry
    With no tears left to weep
    I want to cry
    But instead here I stand

    With no love in my heart
    And no one in my hand
    You may say what you want to
    But I am too far broken

    You think you understand
    I tell you
    You have no idea
    Of the pain that wretches at each contour of my soul

    I say yet again
    And when I was standing in the hall today
    Next to that one person
    I care so much for
    He tapped me
    and said not much more
    For I couldn't look up
    into his deep eyes
    And tell him how much he has made me cry
    And how much it hurt
    to walk into a hall
    and see not a face
    That I was looking for that made me fall
    Right into this deep hole
    That no one can fill
    I'm sorry to say
    That no one, but him, ever will....




    Submitted on 2005-03-14 15:09:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes your poem did make many people relate to this poem, I actually wrote a poem on this subject called the love curse. You did a very good job of displaying what it feel like to be in that kind of position,which so sucks. Of course wiith you beeing a darling you don't want to hurt the friend who has a crush on you and you don't want to be crush by the guy you so want.

    Good write
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      It is hard to manuever around someone that likes you more then you like them. You love them for the friend they are, but nothing more. And then you feel like you have to sneak around so you don't hurt their feelings. It sucks. This was a very interesting way to express yourself. I definitely felt the emotion.

    Great write.

    Alicia
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy this has so much emotion. I liked alot of your metaphors too. This is so powerful and I know how you are feeling. But some part of me gets angry whenever you write about this stuff. Because he does have some kind of feeling for you. It gets me so mad that he is going forth, towards you and asking you out. He does like you, sooner or later your dreams will come true. But if he keeps doing this stuff to you.. I don't know what else to say but to move on. I mean maybe he is like the same way to you as chelsea. But he doesn't admitt. But if you put all the tricks he pulled and all those other things he said to you. It doesn't seem right. And somewhere... There is misunderstanding. I just hope sooner or later dear, you take action and really think about this. To me its serious.. But what he does to you, doesn't seem to much like fairness to you. You can get someone better. Maybe say...Bob

    much love to ya hun

    good luck

    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good, but... you owe me a write. Remember? Mickey Mouse? Yur a week and a day late.
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]


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