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    dots Submission Name: Psuedo Smilesdots
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    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsPsuedo Smilesdots
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    Why am I so fake?
    Scared to let anyone in,
    So cold and distraught.

    Pretending to be something Iím not,
    Just to get people to care,
    Actually notice me,
    But itís for all the wrong reasons.

    Behind my pseudo smiles,
    There is a vulnerable person.
    I pretend to be adjusted,
    But I am not,
    Crying out for help,
    But falling on deaf ears.




    Submitted on 2005-03-14 16:27:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      keep writing... never confide in anyone but your closest and most trusted friends... you are your only true strength...but never take anything for granite...use your creative abilities to bring your self closer to serenity and inner peace... you should be proad of this poem because you have captured that feeling that all us misunderstood ones feel... you probly are different than most but that doesnt make you less important than them. nuture your artistic ways and grow as a poet. become the human you know you are and show others your inner beautey threw the expression of your soul... take care and grow as a poet...=d

    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Man I [censored]in like it...the title drew me in first, it reminded me of an awesome band called COLD.
    But yeah, the peice was really really good, from the wording and format to the emotion it gave out..It's hard to trust, cuz when u do, u give that person or those people everything, but what if it was all a lie, an everything could all down around you...that's what flows through my head, cuz i've been through that [censored] and still am, so i sux...thanx for posting tis it hits close to here...bye
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm....interesting.....I try to be as real as possible so I cant say that I can relate.....but I know what you're going through....it my short years, I've seen it happen to too many people......dont be who they want...be who you are....and if they dont except it "F" them.....you dont need attention from anyone who cant accept you for who you are....it's a beautiful poem and I hope you find the guidance you need....I'm glad you wrote this....it's a nice piece......keep writing

    ~Reveries~
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very realistic expression of what alot of people fo through,also very nicely written.
    I especially liked-

    "Behind my pseudo smiles,
    There is a vulnerable person."
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]
      It is scary... to let people know the "real" you... to let them in... to trust... It doesn't mean that you're being fake: you hold a part of yourself back.
    crying out for help
    but falling on deaf ears.
    very honest lines... So through poetry, you slowly let people in...
    great write!
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by musaXX | [ Reply to This ]


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