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    dots Submission Name: I'll change tomorrowdots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 347
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Just a daunting thought that went through my mind whilst in love. However, the person who i was in love with made it quite clear we had no future. What happens if we are took weak to put heartache past us? How will we end up?


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    You havent lifted a finger all day,
    productivity is a trate you lack.
    Your mood swings are becomming intolerable,
    your always ready to hit back.
    Why must you drink so often?
    Alcohol is much more understanding..
    Get out and experience life.
    Life is just far too demanding.

    You used to be happy once..
    Engulfed in your own sorrow,
    you reply i'll change tomorrow.

    I can smell the gear on your person,
    You know its a gateway drug?
    Throwing you life away for a cheap hit,
    potential destroyed like a thug.
    Why do you feel you need drugs?
    It numbs the pain you reply.
    What pain? I thought you were happy?
    Maybe once, long ago you sigh.

    You used to be happy once..
    Engulfed in your own sorrow,
    you reply i'll change tomorrow.

    You always wanted what you could never have,
    I think its about time you let go.
    So much love to give?
    Comitment for this hoe?
    Why do you love her so much?
    She almost made me believe i could change..
    Your telling me this bitch inspired you?
    My lonliness she'd exchange.

    You used to be happy once..
    engulfed in your own sorrow,
    you reply i'll change tomorrow.

    I dont understand, she will never love you,
    the emotions for her unreflected.
    Forget her she is not worth the sorrow,
    My subconcious has defected.
    Why do you look so miserable?
    It hurts to know i cant have this.
    This girl she is your weakness.
    Am i not entitled to bliss?

    You used to be happy once..
    engulfed in your own sorrow,
    you reply i'll change tomorrow.

    You just threw your last chance away,
    you last attempt at being whole.
    Your girlfriend was keen on a family,
    does that first love still plague your soul?
    You promised me things would change,
    it's permenant damage you know.
    It's been forty years,
    alot of damage, but change i will show.

    So thats it, she's now past you?
    Alas, now to my sorrow,
    you reply i'll change tomorrow







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      this very sad and your point made very clear
    you need to work on stucture of your stanzas
    so they will come across much clear though I
    appreciate good simplicity for good grammer
    it makes it easier on the reader
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this very sad and your point made very clear
    you need to work on stucture of your stanzas
    so they will come across much clear though I
    appreciate good simplicity for good grammer
    it makes it easier on the reader
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this very sad and your point made very clear
    you need to work on stucture of your stanzas
    so they will come across much clear though I
    appreciate good simplicity for good grammer
    it makes it easier on the reader
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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