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    dots Submission Name: Arctic Eyesdots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1660
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 457



    Description:
       Life sux when the guy you have feelings for, tells you he will never love you as you do him.


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    dotsArctic Eyesdots
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    Your glaring eyes
    Hold depth
    They are frosted
    Inert

    Fixed upon
    Nullity
    They gaze
    Obviously
    Right through me

    Your hands
    Are warm
    Furthermore
    Your heart
    But your frozen eyes
    Do not melt
    In my presence

    The room stills
    As I do not
    Silence
    Overcomes it
    And he glares

    I weep




    Submitted on 2004-03-31 17:15:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this, the idea of warmth yet a frozen space that can't be thawed. Very interesting idea, and one I'm somewhat familiar with. I hate cold eyes, they always seem to peer into your soul. I like this a lot. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Wonder Passing | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty real. Hits close to home I would imagine to most people who read. Otherwise open there eyes to that person who they see through. Really interesting, and of course it flowed well. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by Aj | [ Reply to This ]
      the arctic eyes are an amzaing image. I like this, it's a really good poem. I think everybody can relate.
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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