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    dots Submission Name: Untitled #5dots

    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       It's been awhile, but I finally submitted something. 1 love

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    dotsUntitled #5dots

    I enjoy being with you
    you're my inspiration
    just the thought of you
    sends my heart start racing.

    I love how we relate
    in infinite ways
    and how the beauty of your voice
    keeps me dazed all day.

    Your that special person
    I can hopefully trust
    I just pray that my insecurities
    don't mess a good thing up.

    Submitted on 2005-03-14 22:27:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay I also hate this poem you liked didn't you? But whatever this was a little short and I don't think you finished a full thought. I did to your so badly I would think of knowing would strengthen for me. Anyways I don't feel another I'll just get down to the point. You had a spelling error in the third paragraph. And I don't think this was long enough like I said you didn't finish the thought. Well good luck on your next poem. Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I wish I could read your mind because I would give anything to know who the hell you write all this stuff about. This poem is ok. It's a little short and not very thought out but keep working luv ya Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem..it seems as though you really care for the person that you wrote it for..although it really does seem a little short and choppy..and neither of those things have to do with eachother..it could stay short..but the wording seems a little forced and a bit choppy..just thought i would tell you that..but it really was beautiful and you are a very talented writier..wow..
    | Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not sure but I think you meant [mess it up in the kast line . Other than that I really liked it . A little simple but simple is good especially for A Lame Mans Terms guy like myself. Anyway not a bad lil write keep it up~L.t
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      A simple poem telling a story about how you feel about someone you love. It is only in matters of love that the heart starts racing and a mere conversation may result in dazing. Good work! Baafuo
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by Nightrider | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you could be a little more descriptive and really dig deep to express your feelings in more of a unique voice. The topic is obviously dear to you and deserves the wings that you could give it to soar. Tell us why and how and where and such. I just feel like I don't get a sense of you through it. I want to see the person you are speaking of through your eyes. This could be a good piece if you will dig deeper and not be afraid to show more of you. Hope some of this helps- Magnolia
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]

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