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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts of a dictatordots
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    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 878
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    Description:
       Just something those crazy men in power must think. I am just writing it if I were on of them.
    Tell me what you think. Or if you are one of those crazy men in power tell me if I am right. Well those men in power who lose their way anyway.


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    dotsThoughts of a dictatordots
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    You’ve asked me the question and I am going to tell you the truth.
    I’ll tell you exactly what I have fallen to
    You want to know how my mind bends and twist.
    How the purity of self is now corroded a crooked.
    You want to see the shapes and colors behind my eyes.
    You want to watch swords of my thought play games with men’s lives.
    You want to feel the layers of pain that I bare.
    So I’ll give you a piece like a badge you can wear.
    To show all your friends of the adventure you’ve had.
    Then I’ll take it all away in a bright blinding flash.
    So quietly now in the silence you shall slip.
    Then you will know if your own destiny was ever in your grip.




    Submitted on 2005-03-15 08:31:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi there, I enjoyed this very much, especially after my last submission.
    Just wonder if these people ever had a “normal” way of thinking or just becomes like this after receiving these power over people?

    Loved this:
    “So I’ll give you a piece like a badge you can wear.
    To show all your friends of the adventure
    you’ve had”
    I think your interpretation is very close to how it really is.

    “Then you will know if your own destiny was
    ever in your grip”. This has a kind of sarcasm to it, like this person knows he holds the future of people in his hands and abuse it by making people believe and then just take it away.

    Very nicely done.
    ~Lee~
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by Lee | [ Reply to This ]
      Truly captivating...as usual. I shouldn't have expected any less due to your reputation. You do have a few spelling errors (you spelt bright birght) but no harm done. Thanks for the entertainment! (I just posted a new one, too...feel free to check it out!)

    XOXO - Omni :)~
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by omnipotent | [ Reply to This ]


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