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    dots Submission Name: I need you!dots
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    Author: dead,yetalive
    ASL Info:    19,female, mia FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 100/104/28
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 1010
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 848



    Description:
       This "poem" was written for my best friend Ryan C. For as long as I've known him we've never fought and he has always been there for me. He was even willing to get suspended for me. I wrote this to thank him and let him know just how much of an impact he's made in my life. oh! and just so y'all know I did give it to him in like the 7th grade.


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    dotsI need you!dots
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    I need you 'cause you're the only one
    I can turn to when I'm breaking down
    I need you 'cause when my day goes wrong
    You steer it right
    You're the greatest friend anyone could have
    You pick me up when I fall down
    You make me glad when I am sad
    When everyone turns on me
    You're the only one who doesn't
    When my mood is bad enough
    To destroy a building
    With just one punch
    You're the ONLY one who can cheer me up
    I don't think I could get along without you
    When I have my rough times
    Or when I feel "all alone in the world"
    I think of you and begin to feel better
    Just the thought of you
    Brightens up my darkest nights
    The day you turn on me... I'll die!




    Submitted on 2005-03-15 16:27:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      look at X talking bout marriage lol I'm gon have to talk to him bout that you are only 14! lmao

    anyhoo I thought this was sweet as well. In life there are FEW TRUE friends...looks like you found one ma.
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great tribute for an excellent friend. I hope you continue this relationship, and always respect each other. Good write.
    Laura
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by etheariac | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwwwww...That is sweet. He will turn on you when he gets married unless he marries you. Obviuosly, you two have a strong connection and it is more than a friendship which is noted in the pieces description. If I had that sort of bond with anyone, I'd be marrying them right now.


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    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it was good, but it was definately young. The 7th grade thing, it still seems a bit young for even that age, but it was still a good poem, but the best part is that you have such a relationship with a person, and it was a sweet thought to write a poem for your friend like that.
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]


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