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Blue Sky

Author: MystMaker
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I was for some reason inspired to write this. Its a it odd and points but any critiquing or suggestions are good. hope you like it!

Blue Sky

I love to look up at sky and how the clouds wisp or puff as they roam on the wind. It’s so blue and open and endless. I want so much to be in the sky, to fly or soar. I want to roam with the clouds and feel the wind on my face. The feeling of exuberance is unknown to me and I want to feel it.
All I can do is look at it. All I can do is reach for it and try and touch the clouds. But I can’t. I can’t reach them. They are too far away and I wish I could with all my might but I could never reach them. I just can’t. That’s when I hate the sky. I hate its glory and majestic beauty. I hate it all and I wish it would leave. I am jealous of it. I want more from it and it will not give it to me, but still its there. It is still present and will always be there. Well, it won’t always be there. You see, that’s what makes me love the sky. I love it because it won’t be here sometime soon and everyone just keeps telling me to look at it, love it, and enjoy it while you can. And I am and it’s great! I regret not having looked at it before. The more I look at it the more I cry. I will never get a chance to fly and I will never get a chance to see rain fall and I will never see the warmth of the sun again. All I can do is write down all I can before it happens. What happens? Oh, many things. So many things. I will start at the beginning, as most things should. The very beginning of this story.

Submitted on 2005-03-15 17:53:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There is so much emotional chaos in this prose and that is what makes it really good. There is a classic love/hate but also sadness thrown in there. You have done a great job at describing your feelings and why you feel the way you do. I love to look at the sky. Whether it be day or night with starlit sky, it is beautiful. I always thought if I could I would be a bird...a seagull. They have the best of it all. The sky with the ability to fly and the ocean! Anyway, this is a good expression of your feelings and put together well in this prose. Nice job. Take care.

| Posted on 2005-10-27 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  love and hate the classic battle i have seen it a whole lot but this piece brings it out much more you explain why you love and hate. you want sometihng so bad and you keep trying to get it but its like you never will get i anyway so you hate it then you just enjoy it for what its worth and you fell back in love with it...honestly it sounds like most of my relationships falling in love and then finding things to hate its is well written to be honest i would have enjoyed it more if it was done more like a peom in stanzas. i am sure much more of your lines would have stood out to me one did though I love it because it won’t be here sometime soon and everyone just keeps telling me to look at it, great line nice use of words kept it nice and simple good work
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
  This read so real life ...a person just talking to someone or anyone or to no one ...just excited with much energy and emotion expressing how you feel at that very moment...true and un- edited reading as I said just an honest reflection that promises to transform into a story that will explain all of the authors emotions. This, " I love to look up at sky and how the clouds wisp or puff as they roam on the wind. It’s so blue and open and endless" convinced me of better yet to come. I enjoyed this write. `alway write poetry, Cheryl.
| Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a perfect preface to your "Blue Sky" story, I can just see it on the first inside page of the book. I've read your intro to that story, and I'll watch it with interest. I don't normally bother with stories, but I'm sure you'll give a different twist to what is otherwise a worn-out Battlestar Galactica theme, so go for it! Be happy,
| Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this one a lot! Your words were used really well! I understand how you feel about the sky.
I especially like the way you put both emotions, love and hate, into it to show the way you feel about it. If its a story, do continue!
| Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by WindEmpress | [ Reply to This ]
  That left me.. I don't quite know...wanting to read more maybe? It was ..good, I loved how you changed your emotions to love-loving the sky its so great, hate/envy-why is it here? im so jealous of it..and sad-it may go away?...I love reading poems about rain or the sky, or anything of that nature. But I would really love to hear more of this if you are adding on to it, I think it will be even more great if you keep with it..
| Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by Aryeeka | [ Reply to This ]

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