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    dots Submission Name: Watch closely, Hollow Mandots
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    Author: etheariac
    ASL Info:    17/f/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 75/91/36
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Satire
    Total Views: 331
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    Bytes: 942



    Description:
       This is kind of a scary what could society be poem. I think about the world becoming mindless soon and the effects of that. Kind of like Brave New World (best book), which is where the soma reference comes in. Any comments you have would be great.


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    dotsWatch closely, Hollow Mandots
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    The torturous trappings of ribbed steel cages,
    imposed on the brooding of youthful silent minds,
    the masses sit umoved,
    waiting to be entertained so hollowly...
    Actors take the stage and bow down in submission,
    catering to their "positive and concious" behaviors,
    their thirstful egos...
    They watch in apathetic majesty,
    as upon that fraudulent glorified stage,
    appears the king. Here is their heroic enslaver, arriving to preach down to his majority,
    Idolizing, crying," Sweet savior from sadness, what burdensome truth you've lifted from my back!"
    Little did they know the weight was lifted by lies, uttered so convincingly from his ersatz tongue, preparing to move yet again-
    "Listen children," he shouted pridefully into the ears of soma infected psalm,"Give your minds to me, for I am all you have."




    Submitted on 2005-03-15 18:05:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The style you use and the vocabulary you use is wise beyond your years! I wouldn't have thought a teen wrote this. This is really good. It is horrible if society becomes this. Only thinking for the leader, king, master. You did a really good job using descriptive words without over doing anything. I love the title. :) I'm a title person. And this really fit into your idea of people in society all being clones of the same thing for someone. In the third line I think it should be "unmoved". Probably a typo like mine was. :) Great job. I enjoyed this a lot.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]



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