Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Klowns


Author: diabolicmaggot
ASL Info:    16/f/The depths of hell
Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 15 /26 /11
Words: 8
Class/Type: Haiku /Misc
Total Views: 984
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 71



Description:




Klowns



Macabre jester
silently deceiving smile
unnoticed slayer




Submitted on 2005-03-15 19:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  Hey, great haiku! Very unique theme, I got the shivery thought of Chucky, or Stephen King's Pennywise.

silently deceiving smile

An awesome line, it really invokes some spine-chilling pictures into one's head. I don't normally comment on haikus, as I write too many myself, and hardly ever post them, but this one really caught my eye. Well done!
| Posted on 2005-03-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



50522