Deathrow
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Well in order to really "feel" this. you need to read each line faster, louder and with a sense of finality as you go down. Let me know if it works :)
Deathrow
Sitting.........................................................Tied Sweating................................................Slides Goosebumps.........................................Rise Eyes...............................................Tight Blood.......................................Drips Hair....................................Stiff Toes............................Curl Brain..................Whirls Lungs............Leak Breath....Weak Nails......Dig Will..Sinks Death.Rings |
Submitted on 2005-03-16 08:41:29 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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There is a sense of inevitabilty of something happening you get when you read this poem. It's brilliant. Have you, or have you thought about, reading this poem at a Poetry Slam, it would go down really well there.| | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Speacenik | [ Reply to This ] | It works pretty good... You realyl started out with a definate feeling of being trapped and all along the way down, when reading it faster and faster, the reader can really envision the person that is tied to the chair... You also convey the feeling of desperation and its transfer into numbness and giving in to the gripping death... Overall it worked rather well... I like it alot. Keep it up. | .Caleb. | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by Exquisite_Death | [ Reply to This ] | Wow lol it actually works pretty well. The feeling that while you read faster and faster, it seems as though the person's adrenaline is increasing more and more, until the very end, when everything comes crashing down, to the point of his death. I really liked it, it is an idea that is new to me, which makes it all the more enjoyable. Good work! | | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by xeternalshadowx | [ Reply to This ] | |
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