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    dots Submission Name: I wish I was your'sdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 734
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    Description:
       writing for a friend. Please comment.


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    dotsI wish I was your'sdots
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    I see you
    I know you’re not happy
    He treats you like garbage
    you don't need to worry.
    You'll be fine
    Just give it time.
    Your stuck in some quick sand
    I'll give you a hand
    While your man
    Is standing there not understanding
    How much pain he inflects on you.
    Your heart is so cold
    Because of all the bad things your man has done to you.
    Your man thinks your old
    He even told me so.
    I wish I were your lover.
    I would treat you right
    You will get my full attention
    I'll be there for you
    When you need me the most
    When you feel cold and lonely
    I will hold you tight though the night.
    The sight of you
    makes my heart skip a beat.
    You'll be fine
    just tell him
    that you your to fine for him.
    After all he doesn't even know what he has
    He beats you
    even though you’re so sweet.
    He yells at you
    even though it seems you fell from the heavens.
    I wish I were you're lover.
    When you leave him
    I'll be there waiting here for you.




    Submitted on 2005-03-16 09:36:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really pretty awesome. You obviously really like this girl alot and I think it's sweet the way you put that feeling into words. um..you commented one of my poems and I didnt kno how to get back in touch with you so I did so the only I knew how.I'm kinna new to this website so I just commented you back!
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by beautiful_lie2 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow wonderful work you got your point across
    and very symbolic and the relaltionship with your reader is well done keep up the good work
    and keep writing it reminds me of when i was in trouble
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      wow wonderful work you got your point across
    and very symbolic and the relaltionship with your reader is well done keep up the good work
    and keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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